帮我改改英语作文 挑错就行都是日记ResolutionMy dear winter vacation!To tell you the truth,I’m really fed up with the life full of homework!As for study,I have no option but to agree.the holiday arrived At last!Therefor,I’m going to

帮我改改英语作文 挑错就行都是日记ResolutionMy dear winter vacation!To tell you the truth,I’m really fed up with the life full of homework!As for study,I have no option but to agree.the holiday arrived At last!Therefor,I’m going to
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都是日记
Resolution
My dear winter vacation!
To tell you the truth,I’m really fed up with the life full of homework!As for study,I have no option but to agree.the holiday arrived At last!Therefor,I’m going to take a trip to Chengde Mountain Resort.
That is a place of historic interest,Qianlong always went there to spend the summer.The common people were not allowed to go there at that time,but now,things are different!
As an emperor,he has to do so much things,but he also has time to relax,his mother will not ask him to study or work!We have less responsbility than him,we are younger than him,so,why not give us the right to enjoy ourselves?That can not change by me,I’m not the emperor after all.
Close my eyes now,I wish,my trip will be fantastic.
My trip
I’m in Chengde now.
I had just came back from chengde mountain resort.
Actually,this was a developing city.All the houses were renovated,I believed that this city would covered with tall buildings and become as bustling as Beijing some years latter.
This place was not as amusing as I expected,I remembered that it was hotter than any other places,We kept on walking for an hour till we reached the exit.Soon I found that I didn’t feel hot any more!I thought the reason was that there were so many people!
Anyway,that was not an agreeable trip,I was extremely disappointed in it.
Do chores
Tomorrow is the spring festival.These days,my little cousin stayed at my home and didn’t leave until yesterday.My house had became very dirty because of her.So my parents decided to have a spring-cleaning.
My mother asked me to clean the living room and my own bedroom.That was unfair because both the livingroom and the bedroom were very large.But I have no option but to start to work.I put all the sundries into a big cupboard,in this way the house had became clean and tidy.My mother was satisfied with my work.
Although I found a simple way to finish that “spring-cleaning”,I still felt terribly tired.I wish that my mother would not open that cupboard!
The cinema
Today was the first time that I went to that cinema.Because a new film named “ ”was shown.
There is a cinema in our community named ”Show”,that is a strange name.It is near a very tall building,I remember that I have never seen anybody went into that cinema,I think it is very mysterious,and a little bit scary.Actually,it is not different from others,and not so scary as I think.Furthermore,around the cinema there are swimming pool,the sauna,the gym,and so on.It must be very enjoyable to go to these places and enjoy yourself after the actors make curtain call!
the cinema is not mysterious any more,but it had really become more and more attractive than before.
告诉我哪错了就行,不用再粘一遍.谢

帮我改改英语作文 挑错就行都是日记ResolutionMy dear winter vacation!To tell you the truth,I’m really fed up with the life full of homework!As for study,I have no option but to agree.the holiday arrived At last!Therefor,I’m going to
Therefor后面丢个E,
As an emperor,he has to do so much things,but he also has time to relax,his mother will not ask him to study or work这里应该用过去时.
My trip这部分时态有点乱,既然后面都是在叙述过去的事,第一句话也应用过去时.
Do chores 这部分也是这样.But I have no option but to start to work.这句应该用过去时.
The cinema 这部分整个第二段都是叙述过去的电影院吧?既然下面用现成时说它不再神秘,这段显然是过去的,该用过去时.
最后那句该用现在完成时.
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整体来说表达不错的,唯一要注意的是时态.你再仔细斟酌一下.

第一篇，why not (giving) us the right.... 还有That cannot (be changed) by me
第二篇 I believed that this city would covered with tall buildings and become（s) as bustling as Beijing some years (later)

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第一篇，why not (giving) us the right.... 还有That cannot (be changed) by me
第二篇 I believed that this city would covered with tall buildings and become（s) as bustling as Beijing some years (later)
第三篇These days, my little cousin （has been) staying (in) my home
this way the house had (become) clean and tidy.
第四篇 It must be very enjoyable to go to these places .(E)njoy yourself after the actors make curtain call!
PS:写的还是挺不错的

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Therefor后面丢个E，
As an emperor, he has to do so much things, but he also has time to relax, his mother will not ask him to study or work这里应该用过去时。
My trip这部分时态有点乱，既然后面都是在叙述过去的事，第一句话也应用过去时。 Do c...

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Therefor后面丢个E，
As an emperor, he has to do so much things, but he also has time to relax, his mother will not ask him to study or work这里应该用过去时。
My trip这部分时态有点乱，既然后面都是在叙述过去的事，第一句话也应用过去时。 Do chores 这部分也是这样。 But I have no option but to start to work. 这句应该用过去时。
The cinema 这部分整个第二段都是叙述过去的电影院吧？既然下面用现成时说它不再神秘，这段显然是过去的，该用过去时。
最后那句该用现在完成时。
整体来说表达不错的，唯一要注意的是时态。你再仔细斟酌一下。上面那位大哥说的对

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好，非常好