英语挑错 Dear Family Members:Thank you first that you will be my another forign family for one year.Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe myself.You know I'm a chines

英语挑错 Dear Family Members:Thank you first that you will be my another forign family for one year.Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe myself.You know I'm a chines
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Dear Family Members:
Thank you first that you will be my another forign family for one year.
Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe myself.
You know I'm a chinese girl,born in a cultural family,I have my own dream,and my parents have the same for me.
I want to learn the language,also I love learn languanes.I have learn Ehglish for nearly 9 years.
My parents taught me Ehglish since I was a child.
I hope I can speak English as easy as my mother tongue Chinese.
I can think something with English.
I'm a confident girl.I learned piano when I was 5 years old.
For my hardwork ,I won some competition before.
I love music very much.It's a key part of my life.
I cannot away form it.As the matter of fact,I'm thankful girl.
My family is not so rich,but they give me this chance to improve myself ,to do the job for my future.
At the same time of my thanks for you,I must say thanks for my parents.
For me,they have done so many things.
So I won't sorry for them.I will work hard.
For my future.also of cause for them.
You know I'm the only child in my family.
The teacher told me I seem to have a borther or sister in your family.
Form so young I would like to have a brother or sister.
You know it's lonely when I stay at home by myself.
I don't know who I can talk to,just get together with my computer or some novels.
I always look far away from the window.
I could always look a couple of twins.
They are so cute.
The most improtant is,they can play each other,talk to each other.
Maybe I'm also looking foward that kind of life.
It seems to be every child who born in China would like the style of life.
But if I won't,it's okey so.
I know I will stay with your family ten months.
I'm thinking about how to be your family member.
I always do housework in my home.
So,I can do some basic work for you by myself.
I like cooking.
In fect,I'm not good at it.
I always help my mom to cook.
Maybe I can do some simple ones.
Also,the teacher told me maybe the family will have a garden.
I'm so suprised about this.
You know I live in a department for many years.
We just have a public garden in our communition.
It's not mine.
I like flowers and grass.
Maybe I also can help you to do some simple things to make your garden more beautiful.
Ten months are not so long,but this is the first time to leave my parents for this long time.
Maybe I will cry coz I miss them.
Please forgive my tears.
I'm looking foward the life in the new family,the new mom,new dad maybe also the new brother or sister.
Just thank you.
See you soon.
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英语挑错 Dear Family Members:Thank you first that you will be my another forign family for one year.Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe myself.You know I'm a chines
Dear Family:
Firstly thank you for being my another foreign family for one year.
Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe me myself.
You know I'm a chinese girl, born in a cultural family,I have my own dream,and my parents have the same one for me.
I want to learn languages,also I love learning languages.I have learned English for nearly 9 years.
My parents have taught me English since I was a child.
I hope I can speak English as easy as my mother speaking Chinese.
I can think something in English.
I'm a confident girl.I learned piano when I was 5 years old.
I won some competition before with my hard work.
I love music very much.It's a key part of my life.
I cannot be away from it.As the matter of fact,I'm a thankful girl.
My family is not so rich,but they give me this chance to improve me myself ,to do the job for my future.
At the same time of saying thanks to you,I must say thanks to my parents.
For me,they have done so many things.
So I won't be sorry to them.I will work hard.
For my future.also of cause for them.
You know I'm the only one child in my family.
The teacher told me I seem to have a brother or sister in my family.
He thought that I would have a brother or sister because I am so young.
You know it's lonely when I stay at home by myself.
I don't know whom I can talk to,just get together with my computer or some novels.
I always look far away from the window.
I could always look a couple of twins.
They are so cute.
The most improtant is that they can play with each other,talk to each other.
Maybe I'm also looking foward to that kind of life.
It seems that every child who born in China would like the style of life.
But if I won't,it's okey so.
I know I will stay with your family for ten months.
I'm thinking about how to be one of your family member.
I always do housework at my home.
So,I can do some basic work by myself.
I like cooking.
In fact,I'm not good at it.
I always help my mom to cook.
Maybe I can do some simple cooking.
Also,the teacher told me maybe the family will have a garden.
I'm so suprised about this.
You know I live in an apartment for many years.
We just have a public garden in our communition.
It's not mine.
I like flowers and grass.
Maybe I also can help you to do some simple things to make your garden more beautiful.
Ten months are not so long,but this is the first time to leave my parents for so long a time.
Maybe I will cry coz I miss them.
Please forgive my tears.
I'm looking foward the life in the new family,the new mom,new dad and maybe also the new brother or sister.
Just thank you.
See you soon.

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我不觉得有什么错误呀 ……
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第二行应为foreign，also I love 后跟learning,i have 后跟learned,My parents后加上 “have”，easy 改为easily,I can think something "in" English,I cannot away form it.改为I can not live without it,they can play each other改为t...

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第二行应为foreign，also I love 后跟learning,i have 后跟learned,My parents后加上 “have”，easy 改为easily,I can think something "in" English,I cannot away form it.改为I can not live without it,they can play each other改为they can play with each other,I'm also looking foward that kind of life.改为 I'm also looking foward to that kind of life.I'm also looking foward that kind of life改为I'm also looking foward “to” that kind of life.You know I live in a department for many years.改为You know I "have" live in a department for many years. I'm looking foward the life in the new family,the new mom,new dad maybe also the new brother or sister.改为I'm looking foward "to"the life in the new family,the new mom,new dad maybe also the new brother or sister. 其他的错误应该没了吧。

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